Sunday, May 17, 2009

Tabloid vs. Broadsheet

Tabloid:


Bluewin Closes Chat - Children Harassed
The Bluewin chatroom which was lead by swisscom mobile, decided to shut down. The negative use of the chatrooom has caused pedophiles to have easy access to personal and private information. The decision was made, due to a shocking test: Sabine Müller, pretended to be 13 year old girl. After only 47 seconds the first sex-bid was made. The result: he was 20 years older. After this, the swisscom chatroom decided it was better to close down. The act which was done by swisscom should be a role model for many other chatrooms, such as Facebook. Also the famous facebook chatroom proves to have cases where children have been invited to a meeting, and then brutally harassed. These examples should have world-wide consequences; however nothing has been done yet.

Broadsheet:


Online Chatroom Takes Archetype Decision
The Bluewin chatroom, which was lead by the Swiss telecommunication company, Swisscom decided to close their chatroom. The frequent use of the chatroom has also caused pedophiles and murders to have various access to personal information. Felix Graf, the manager of the chatroom stated that: “We do not longer want to be associated with sexaul activities on our chatroom”. For this exact reason the chatroom was closed for the good of the children. Furthermore, the Zürich Kantons Polizei (Zurich Police) did an online test to see whether there would be any sexual harassment. They pretended to be a 13 year old girl, an there was an appalling result, after only 47 seconds the alleged 13 year old girl was offered sexual activity. The man who offered sexual activity was 33 years old. Not only the Bluewin chatroom shows sexual activity but also the famous chatroom Facebook. The consequences of these chatrooms should be seen as a world-wide problem. For more information on how to protect your children turn to page 23.

1 comment:

Mister Doubt said...

Article 1 -

Capitalise names (ie Swisscom)

"Sabine Müller, pretended to be 13 year old girl. After only 47 seconds the first sex-bid was made. The result: he was 20 years older."

I'm not sure I understand this, please read closely and edit.

Almost always, if you use a semi-colon followed by 'however' (an excellent habit to have), use a comma after 'however'.

Good articles Virginia, but I am not convinced that you have managed to provide two distinct tones. Check Theresa's articles for a good example.

Mr. Doubt